We took the first draft edit of the film into Westminster Cathedral Primary School to get some feedback today.
The overall reaction was very positive with some good constructive opinions on how to improve it. The main ways to improve the first draft was to make it shorter; to keep the current themes but to trim them down a little to avoid any repetition or reiteration. It was also felt that some of the reminiscences were a little too
technical and these could be sacrificed to enable us to keep some more
funny stories about life on the river and this needed to include the
re-introduction of at least one story about pilfering. To add titles to the sections. To include the interviewees nicknames in their lower thirds along with the year they were apprenticed.
It was felt that the closing credits were scrolling too fast up the screen. We discussed that the Community Channel insist on credits being no longer than 30 seconds so it was agreed to make them longer for the DVD and website only.
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